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I have always loved horses and I have ridden since I was 6 years old. I have – for as long as I remember - had a passion for horseracing. After high school I became apprentice jockey the champion trainer in Denmark. During my apprentice period I worked 3 months in New Zealand and 8 months in England to get to now other training methods and educate myself. After finishing my apprentice period I started a bachelor in natural resources at The University of Copenhagen where I intend to specialize in environmental economics.
For some time I have been searching for an education which combines horseracing and business and I found it in the Darley Flying Start programme. It seems to me the ideal combination of business, finance and management in the thoroughbred industry. I feel like this programme was created just for me as it involves all facets of the racing industry and because it gives it’s students the opportunity to learn from the very best in each specific area. It is my hope and anticipation that the programme will open doors I didn’t even know existed.

I have always loved horses and I have been riding horses since I was six years old.I have a passion for horse racing.After High School, I became an apprentice jockey ( the champion❓) trainer in Denmark.During my aprentiship,I worked for three months in New Zealand and eight months in the UK,where I got to know other methods of training horses and educate myself.After I finished my aprentiship,I startet a Bachelor Degree in natural resources at the university of Copenhagen,where I intend to specialize in enviromental economics.
I `am looking for an education,which combines horse racing , business,finance and management ( thoroughbred ?fuldblod ((hvorfor vil du bruge ordet: fuldblod?))in the horse racing industry.This programme is just for me,as it involves all aspects of the horse racing industry and it gives students the opportunity to learn from the best in every area. Yours Sincerely xxxxx ( du behøver ikke at være føelsesfuld,men nøgtern og lige til sagen!) ønsker dig held og lykke på din vej og håber jeg kunne være lidt hjælp. P.S Du kan skrive som indledning på første linje : To whom it may concern,

Tak for hjælpen.
Jeg har lige et par tilføjelser:
2. linje skulle være: After high school I became apprentice jockey FOR the champion trainer in Denmark.
Horseracing industry = væddeløbsindustrien, mens thoroughbred industry = fuldblodsindustrien. H. industry dækker kun selve væddeløbene, mens T. industry også dækker avlen. Det er kun fuldblod, der bliver brugt til galopløb, derfor er en fuldblod og en væddeløbshest det samme.
Jeg vil stadig gerne have flere kommentarer.
Tak

I have always loved horses and I have been riding since I was 6 years old. I have – for as long as I remember - had a passion for horseracing. After high school I became an apprentice jockey for the(a?(modsat MESTEREN, så en mester træner?) champion trainer in Denmark.
During my apprenticeshipI worked 3 months in New Zealand and 8 months in England to get to know other training methods and educate myself. After finishing my apprenticeship I started studying for a(/taking a bachelor degree er måske mere korrekt) bachelor degree in natural resources at The University of Copenhagen where I intend to specialize in environmental economics.
For some time I have been searching for an education which combines horseracing and business and I have found this in the Darley Flying Start programme. It seems to me to be the ideal combination of business, finance and management in the thoroughbred industry. I feel like this programme was created just for me as it involves all facets of the racing industry and because it gives its students the opportunity to learn from the very best in each specific area.
It is my hope and anticipation that the programme will open doors I didn’t even know existed.
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Havde bolded mine ændringer, gad sol.dk ikke ;/